Hello and welcome to the Hump Day Hook. Well, things are developing very quickly indeed all of a sudden, and today I share with you another excerpt from my rough first draft of The Vampire of Blackpool that was written for NaNoWriMo 2012. The manuscript has been requested for consideration by a publisher I contacted for a different project. So, who knows, there could be a few new releases this year…
“Meredith!” she called, hurrying over to me, “You came!”
She held a glass of wine in one hand and a small clutch bag tucked under her other arm. I stood still as she approached, careful to keep my expression blank. She faltered a little as she realised I was not so excited about her presence.
“Are you alright?” she asked uncertainly, “You look pale.”
I had to smile at her sweet naivety, and she tried not to gasp as she saw my fangs exposed.
“I am hungry,” I replied, “I have not yet found suitable food.”
“Oh,” she said quietly, glancing around her, “Where do you usually, um, find food?”
I simply stared at her, allowing my eyes to glow silver. She caught her breath, momentarily struggling with her desire to appease me, and her as yet stronger urge to repel me using her magic. I sensed the landlord approaching us before he spoke.
“You know the rules, Meredith,” Paul said levelly, “No feeding in my pub. Take it outside.”
This was a snippet of conversation between the vampire protagonist Meredith Hanson, and her new friend and potential lover Samantha Morris. Now, why not check out some more Hump Day Hook excerpts over on our blog? Or you can join us on Facebook. Happy Humping!
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Samantha seems to have a sweet naivety to her that I would love to read more of. Great hook, Catherine!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ellen, she is certainly a sweet character!
DeleteVery intriguing! And best of luck with the request!
ReplyDeleteOoo, I like the play between Samantha's innocence and hungry Meredith. Nice hook!
ReplyDeleteThank you Penny!
Deleteyes the contrast between the two leaves me wanting more. And the last line cracked me up
ReplyDeleteHa ha, you'd be surprised what goes on in Northern pubs! Thanks.
DeleteNice hook! "You look pale," made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteLoved the interaction between Meredith and Samantha. And the pub owner was great.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Yes, he is a funny, aloof character.
DeleteLove the humour here, great hook.
ReplyDeleteWell, I think he is delirious, probably, with whom it does not happen. And I politely answer via SMS - "The hat is in place, everything is fine." "No, twice!" - the next message comes from the Center. At this point I got a little worn out. https://socialfollowerspro.uk/buy-facebook-followers/
ReplyDeleteI do not know how to treat clinical signs of double vision. There is no education and experience. Therefore, I do not undertake this.